Christmas as we know it, did not exist before the birth of Christ. Therefore, it would have been impossible for King Herod to “steal Christmas” from the villagers as you have him vowing to do here.P. 32
This part is very confusing. You have the Holy City of Jerusalem in the first century with an underground mass transit subway system. This technology did not exist until almost two thousand years later. The confusing part is that you seem to realize this through your dialogue, because everyone keeps pointing at it and no one knows what it is.P. 49
Mules don’t have wheels.P. 52
First of all, Frosty the Snowman was never the mayor of
On their way to the manager, Mary and Joseph should not be singing “Away in the Manger” since it depicts future events or afterwards sing “Rudolph the Red Nose Reindeer” as the concept of a reindeer is foreign to the portrayed place and time.