Hey guys! This is coming along nicely. Even though we're in closed pre-production, there's already a ton of Internet buzz, and with Will on board
, we expect it to be relatively smooth sailing from here on out.
Wanted to get you our feedback on the draftâ¦I think with a little--or possibly massive--retooling, this one will be guaranteed Oscar-bait.
We wanted the script to start off with some upbeat energy, and weâre glad to see youâve done that. But I think we can do without the rap introductory sequence. On page 8 youâve got Obama singing:
So Iâd like to take a minute
Just sit right there
Iâll tell you how I became the President
Of the United States of America.
First off, if weâre going to have a theme song, letâs get Will involved. Heâs had a lot of success with that type of thing, and Iâve recently become confident that he knows how to rhyme better than you.
But frankly, we thought you could accomplish the same effect with a scene of young Barack at a student rally, or maybe try replacing the ârare cab driverâ character with an AIDS clinic worker.
Also, weâre pretty sure Obama never said âsmell you laterâ to anyone, let alone to George W. Bush on his inauguration day.