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« Reply #20 on: December 04, 2003, 07:51 AM »
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I hope I have answered your question.


my question was "are you retarded and/or asian?"

and yes, you've answered it with crystal clarity, thank you.
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« Reply #21 on: December 04, 2003, 08:50 AM »
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Alderaan, listen. I DO want you to take me seriously, but there's no point arguing about my english skills as they far surpass yours - obviously. I have not come hear to try to teach people english, but rather I teach about the essence of love, and how it can be translated into the written world. You see, love is very special thing and you can't keep me from conveying (ore trying to convey) my evangelium of peace, love and democracy and freedom of speak. My previous post was not ment to educate, but more or less try to steer you guys in on my way of think, so to speak. I hope I have answered your question.

Thank you, I kiss you back.


It's like an episode of Sailor Moon... Not that I watch it... I have just heard of it... oh god...
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« Reply #22 on: December 04, 2003, 08:59 AM »
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Alderaan, listen.(fragment) I DO want you to take me seriously, but there's there is (you shouldn't use contractions in essay writing) no point in arguing about my English skills, as they far surpass yours ("yours" is not a very good usage of the possessive; a better choice would be "far suprass your talents") - obviously. (run-on sentence). I have not come hear to try to teach people English, but rather, I (??) teach about the essence of love, and how it can be translated into the written world. (If you were truly a wonderful writer, I would have been more impressed if your "writings" somehow implied that love superceded the written world.  That would have been cool.) You see, love is very special thing and you can't cannot (again, you shouldn't use contractions in essay writing) keep me from conveying (ore or (unless you were trying to make a geological/ mineral reference) trying to convey) my evangelium (that's not a word, dumbass.  Did you mean, evangelism?) of peace, love and democracy and freedom of speak. (awkward sentence structure) My previous post was not meant to educate, but more or less, try (attempt would be a better word, here) to steer you guys (too colloquial for essay/ response writing) in on (incorrect preposition usage) my way of think (WTF? Huh? Oh, right), so to speak. I hope I have answered your question. (Heh)

Thank you, I kiss you back.


Also, you need to be careful which prepositions you use with certain verb tenses, as some are better (if not simply more correct) choices than others.

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Hey numnuts, here's a quote from Anna Quindlen:

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Ignorant free speech usually works against the speaker, which is why it should be given reign instead of suppressed.


Usually, I bust that quote out in Oxfora, but it is obviously needed here.  

So I am guessing you are in the 10th grade, just spent a month discussing modern poetry and now you think you are William Wordsworth.  Well how about this... keep this poetry theme and check out how Sylvia Plath died, then use that as a suggestion from me.

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« Reply #23 on: December 04, 2003, 09:09 AM »
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You see, love is very special thing and you can't keep me from conveying (ore trying to convey) my evangelium of peace, love and democracy and freedom of speak.


I figured English wasn't your first language, one could even say that I smelt it.
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« Reply #24 on: December 04, 2003, 10:01 AM »
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I don't know why you direct this hatred of yours towards me, but I assure you that it has or hasn't left me untouched. If you gentlemen have something to say, then say it, but please don't waste your and my time deconstructing sentences and make all this fuzz about a few typos. Sure, I may knot be the best writer in the word, but at least I make an honest effort. All I have to do is get myself an editor and I'm on top of my game.

Shore Dude: Evangelism is in fact a word. It roughly translates as "happy message". I hope you've learned something. And remember: there are no dumb questions, only dumb answers!
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« Reply #25 on: December 04, 2003, 10:04 AM »
and you've provided us with a plethora of those. thanks!
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« Reply #26 on: December 04, 2003, 10:10 AM »
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Alderaan, listen. I DO want you to take me seriously, but there's no point arguing about my english skills as they far surpass yours - obviously.


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Sure, I may knot be the best writer in the word, but at least I make an honest effort. All I have to do is get myself an editor and I'm on top of my game.


Hot ironing!  You'd better, knot contradict yourself again!

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Shore Dude: Evangelism is in fact a word. It roughly translates as "happy message". I hope you've learned something. And remember: there are no dumb questions, only dumb answers!


Hey dumbass.... you typed evangelium, which is not a word (I am sorry to say).  I was being slightly sarcastic.  Whoops, there I go again!

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I don't know why you direct this hatred of yours towards me,


First off, it's not a hatred.  Okay, maybe for Abe it is, but I do not hate.  If anything, I like you because you bring me great amusement.  

If you come in here with this pompous, "I am better than you attitude" -- how can you ask why people are not going to respond to it in a manner which you like?

Your writing skills may well exceed greatness (note: obvious sarcasm), but your interpersonal relations need some work, wouldn't you say?
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« Reply #27 on: December 04, 2003, 10:33 AM »
Umm, guys.  I hate to break up the party, but I smell something:
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« Reply #28 on: December 04, 2003, 10:45 AM »
Shore Dude: I'm not contradicting myself, because I don't regard that other guy to be the greatest writer. Nor do I consider myself being a bad one, just not the best one.

And when I in my previous post wrote evangelism, I really meant to write evangelium. Because it is really a word.

My "I am better than you attitude" ("I am better than you"-attitude or I-am-better-than-you-attitude .. ?) came to be AFTER the critical comments.
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« Reply #29 on: December 04, 2003, 10:50 AM »
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My "I am better than you attitude" ("I am better than you"-attitude or I-am-better-than-you-attitude .. ?) came to be AFTER the critical comments.


That's somewhat fair -- I'll give you that.

Although, take Alderaan's advice and don't be so sensitive.  This is a humor website regardless of the forum.  People come here to be amused and to bring amusement.  If you are looking for serious reviews, then you may need to investigate other places on the interweb.
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« Reply #30 on: December 04, 2003, 11:01 AM »
HAY! Who says I'm sensitive? :-|
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« Reply #31 on: December 04, 2003, 11:04 AM »
Word is not Real nor Truth,
  but deadly virus of humanity,
transmitted through language.
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« Reply #32 on: December 04, 2003, 11:44 AM »
Now I know i'm not the most respected poster on this forum, but I have to say I side with Tennisball here. Irregardless of what you may think of me from here on end.

Sure Tennisballs writing is a bit rough in its edges. But try not to think of it as unprecise, but instead, off-the-cuff. He is most certainly expressing his innermost, or as they say, his insides. Who here could honestly say that you don't know Tennisball inside and out by now? Remarkable! In 5 posts he has thaught us more about himself than even most people here do in a lifespan.

With all your irony and your funny "Haha, I say something but I mean something else"-attitude*, have you ever told anyone you loved them? That they mean something to you? That you have a very special place in your insides for them?! No!!

That isn't to say that I don't respect you as members of a forum, I do. But, for one thing, please, can't we all use more of those big red hearts with little cute faces that jump around? Or cuddly bears with tricks up their sleeves, who always release birds at the last minute so that everyone gets that special feeling in their gut?! I would notice such things, and I would have no problems with them whatsoever.


* Like if you say "I think that A is the case" but actually you mean that A isn't the case, but rather B or C. But by expressing that you think that A is the case you express something different all-together.
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« Reply #33 on: December 04, 2003, 11:44 AM »
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Though I am troubled and concerned about your hostile replies. Isn't there a tiny bit of interest, love-wise? Anyway, you must respect my poem, or piece of writing if you will, because I am clearly more refined than you are. If you don't understand my work, than don't crank out negative comments like that. I had appreciated a serious review of my writing. For you uneducated peeps out there who still want to give it a shot, try to look for the following hidden aspects, or "writing tricks" in layman's terms:

* Metaphor

This is one of the most obvious ways. A metaphor isn't just a representation of another object-- the object it represents conveys an *idea*. To give a very clicheé example-- hearts represent love.  If I write a poem comparing a factory to a beating heart, I might be really talking about love (or not!).

* Allusion

An allusion is a borrowing of words or concepts from another work of literature in order to implement what those words or concepts convey.

* Connotation

Connotation is those ideas and feelings that a word suggests.  Take the word "bite". It's a fairly generic word. If you use the word "chomp", it suggests a very decisive kind of bite. A "nibble" is weaker or more timid. Using words that have a greater connotation, according to the poem's context, can add impact to the poem.

* Sound and rhythm

A lot could be said on this subject. Suffice it to say that line length, beat, the choice of predominant vowels, the choice of predominant consonants, alliteration, etc can add to the poem's effect.

* Succinctness

In general, in a poem, it's better to say something in fewer words rather than more. Also, eliminating unnecessary "boring" words  and phrases that are common and replacing them with more suggestive words can help.

* Word play and puns

I once wrote a poem called "The Most Beautiful Period of My Life". It was about youth, except that the poem ends with the narrator getting her menstrual period after fearing she was pregnant. The double-entendre of the word "period" made the title more interesting and conveyed more ideas than if it hadn't been there.


*L*. Wow. Okay, so I'm going with the assumption that this guy is just pulling our leg. And really well, too -- I'm laughing my ass off at some of these responses; it's brilliant.  I actually printed that list of tips up and put it on my wall. "Damn it! What does a heart represent again? Curse my lack of sophistication! If only I had a list of rules of some sort!"
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« Reply #34 on: December 04, 2003, 11:50 AM »
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Blah blah blah... Jibberish... Blah blah...


Abe, please tell me that this is Tennisball pretending to be someone else who agrees with him!?

I love when fanboys do this.
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« Reply #35 on: December 04, 2003, 11:57 AM »
I assumed they were both Gdbtch
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« Reply #36 on: December 04, 2003, 12:05 PM »
Actually no. But I can see why you would think that. There can't be two hot and happening authors on the PWOT can there.
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« Reply #37 on: December 04, 2003, 12:05 PM »
they're not posting from the same ip, but they are both posting from finnish domains, so it's a safe bet.

i bet he's hallucinating from all the ljutefisk.
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« Reply #38 on: December 04, 2003, 01:25 PM »
I don't know if it's still cool to make fun of Tennisball, but I couldn't let this one go.

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I don't know why you direct this hatred of yours towards me, but I assure you that it has or hasn't left me untouched.



Which one?  Has it or hasn't it?
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« Reply #39 on: December 04, 2003, 02:17 PM »
After reading through this thread I find that I have a few things to say:

1. Tennisball could be pulling our leg, because, and let's face it, it wouldn't be the first time someone did.

2. This person writes decently, far better than most of the blithering imbeciles that find their ways to this site.  The writing isn't perfect, but it's far from abyssmal.

3. This person has not in any way led me to believe that he/she writes with greater skill than Alderaan.  Tennisball, if you want to be accepted here, the last thing you want to do is stuff hubris down our throats.  Stating you're better than a veteran poster like Alderaan, in almost any regard, most specifically as a newcomer, is just foolish.  Learn some humility.

4. Welcome to the forums, Tennisball.  Don't take anything here too seriously, unless the tone of a thread specifically calls for it.  Also, if you're looking for a more serious place to interact, take a look around the Hitler's Brain forum.  While I don't suggest posting a topic like this, or posting just about any topic as a new poster (around here you generally post within a few threads to prove yourself before venturing to formulate your own), you may find you like the occasionally heated debates that come about there.

5. I have to urinate, so if I had any other valid points you'll probably never hear them.  I will now take my leave of you to alleviate this nagging pressure in my crotch.  Good day.
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