Once again, I'm hooked.

That passage about the "disappearance" of the girl, follwed by the picture of that spider just fucking got to me. I had to take a break. Seriously, my flesh was crawling. This is great.

The Nedroid drawing of a girl being disassembled by a shadow person is very off putting. It's like a teddy bear full of razor blades.

Wow, it's great so far.  I didn't expect to have to wait another WEEK for another part but actually the return to reading in serial format has me excited.  I always love the anticipation.  I'm glad you write, David.

Nedroid's pictures are the perfect compliment.  Their cuteness makes things all the more grim.  There is nothing as creepy as a children's-style Shadow Man with a :) face.

Man, now I have to wait another week before seeing what the spider thing was? DAMN YOU DAVID WONG!!!11!!one!!!

Maybe only 5 pages, but the most MIND BLOWING 5 pages ever written! The whole thing with the assistant has gotten me wondering whether Dave really is crazy or whether he's correct. I'm sure the Shadow People are real, but just because that would be kinda anti-climatic to find out he's just crazy.

Hooked, hooked and hooked.  But holy fucking shit, that was perfect.  I had full body chills for the goliath spider, and I had to stop reading because I got so creeped out.

My only complaint is that it's going to be in segments :(.  And a whole WEEK?  But it is going to be damn worth it, and I'm looking forward to the next installments.

Dave, as a reader, I say you sit down and do some more hardcore editing and propose your story to an actual publisher.  This shouldn't be restricted to readers soley on the internet and a few copies you sell off of cafepress. I should see banners advertising this book on buses, seeing the book on it's own table at Barnes and Noble, and see it as a required reading at school.  You're an awesome writer, and who cares if you only sold a few hundred copies?  Successful book series have come up from lowlier spots.  If you get rejected, pfft, whatever, move onto a next publisher.  Lots of series get rejected tens of times before they get picked up by a publisher.  I say do it.  Get John Dies at the End out there.

I absolutely adored the beginning of this story - and I think it is a fantastic idea to keep posting it as a serial. You've made me want to buy hard copies now and make my friends read it!

I loved the bird eating spider..... can't wait for the next installment!

The new story's living up to it's predecessor. I was half afraid it'd turn out not to be as good as the last one, since the last one's just a wonderful piece of fiction. So far, looks like my fears were wrong. Keep up the great work.

But of course, this is what the Shadow People do - they don't just kill people, they erase them. The researchers would have no idea, but since this Shadow Man seems to want specifically bother Dave for currently undisclosed reasons, he remembers the incident in vivid detail.

That assistant scene was chilling, by the way. The whole business about a fucking bird-eating spider was great, and the ink blots were perfect.